Help Editing for Effetiveness * Letter to my representatives

[aes14]

Please let me know your suggestions as I am writing letter s to my representatives. Thank you.

Dear Senator X:

I am writing to ask that one of your employees who writes letters to your constituents please write me an email or letter outlining your position on internet gambling.

I am a hard working, tax-paying, law abiding citizen. When I get home from work I enjoy logging on to play poker as I find it fun, intellectually stimulating, competitive and challenging.

It is now being communicated to me by the US government that the pursuit of happiness, intellectual stimulation, healthy competition and challenging yourself is immoral and illegal and I am not allowed to play poker from the comfort of my own home with my own money any longer.

Please respond with your position on why this is and if Maryland tax-payers and constituents should feel that their representative things they are immoral for playing poker online.

This will surely affect my vote in November as I feel my rights are being violated and the government is deciding whether or not a hobby of mine is moral or immoral.

I await your response.

Sincerely,

[Performify]

be more direct in your first paragraph. I.e:

"I am writing to ask your position on internet gambling" or even "I am writing to ask your position on internet gambling, in light of the passage of the Unlawful Internet Gambling Enforcement Act of 2006"

[shamus]

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Please respond with your position on why this is and if Maryland tax-payers and constituents should feel that their representative things they are immoral for playing poker online.

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"Thinks," not things. Also, "tax-payer" doesn't really need a hyphen.

I agree w/Performify's advice also. Otherwise, looks good.

[jb9]

How about something like this:

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I would like to direct this to the distinguished members of the panel: You lousy corksuckers. You have violated my fargin rights. Dis somanumbatching country was founded so that the liberties of common patriotic citizens like me could not be taken away by a bunch of fargin iceholes... like yourselves.

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[Performify]

You don't want to suggest "something like this". My brother suggested something like this... once!

[permafrost]

Decent letter but your barking up the wrong tree. Talk to the State.

Maryland Criminal Code, title 12, sec.102
a.(prohibition) A person may not bet, wager or gamble
b.(penalty) minumum 6 months and/or $200