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08-19-2006, 05:28 AM
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hip hop heads will like this, a rap i wrote, it has a poker metaphorr
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When the fight time comes, aces don't run, they'd rather live life and die by the gun heres the punchline, MotherF****r its crunch time, everybody tryna get they cake in god's lunchline [Verse] I spit that real S**t, like Immortal Technique, but I ain't here to talk about Bush or the Shieks, Your Aces are your best in your deck of friends but the Kings are the ones that'll get you ends The Queens are the ones you take back to your castle When you the +Jack of clubs+ it aint no hassle everybody wants that dime piece, that perfect 10 cause once you get it, you straight till the end I gotta liquid flow like a super soaker but to me, life is one big game of poker get money stack chips, take 'em from jokers then turn around and push rocks to cokers im havin' a revelation, as i write this it'll be ya salvation, it goes just like this: [Hook] 
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08-19-2006, 05:30 AM
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Re: hip hop heads will like this, a rap i wrote, it has a poker metaph
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heres the punchline, <font color="green">[censored]</font> its crunch time, [/ QUOTE ]
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08-19-2006, 05:48 AM
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Re: hip hop heads will like this, a rap i wrote, it has a poker metaph
I like immortal tech, but when people rap or sing about cards, I just think it's trying to hard.
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08-19-2006, 05:55 AM
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Re: hip hop heads will like this, a rap i wrote, it has a poker metaph
while its harder to tell in text, the flow to this piece was weird and seemed off. concept was okay though. those are my two cents
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08-19-2006, 07:00 AM
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Re: hip hop heads will like this, a rap i wrote, it has a poker metaph
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while its harder to tell in text, the flow to this piece was weird and seemed off. [/ QUOTE ] I think it depends who raps it. It worked well with the beat to "Flava In Ya Ear." It could definitely be tighter though; I had to work some to fit things in correctly. It's not a disaster, but it definitely requires some effort to hold the beat. It would benefit from more revision. Also, it's not a "poker metaphor." It's an unfocused verse that incorporates cards in an attempt to give it structure.
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08-19-2006, 07:28 AM
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Re: hip hop heads will like this, a rap i wrote, it has a poker metaph
please record and put on internet... words alone arent enough to tell if its good.
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