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05-21-2006, 07:05 PM
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Run on sentence?!
I'm looking at a paper I got back from a teacher and she claimed this was a run on sentence, therefore deducting 40 points on a 300 point paper. Personally I don't see it, just wanted OOT opinion on it. If you could respond with why you marked the answer you did it would be appriciated.
Here it is- Cromwell made mistakes, some were terrible, but he was a man who lived for God and believed that everything he did was for him and in God's interest. 
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#2
05-21-2006, 07:08 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
I would say...
Cromwell made mistakes. Some were terrible, but he was a man who lived for God , and he believed that everything he did was for him and in God's interest.
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#3
05-21-2006, 07:08 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
I don't know if it's a run-on, but the sentence is really redundant.
Cromwell: 1. lived for god 2. believed everything he did was for God 3. everything he did was in God's interest. How are those things substantially different? It could easlily be shorter.
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#4
05-21-2006, 07:11 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
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Personally I don't see it, just wanted OOT opinion on it. [/ QUOTE ] I am deducting 40 points from your thread for this.
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#5
05-21-2006, 07:11 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
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I would say... Cromwell made mistakes. Some were terrible, but he was a man who lived for God , and he believed that everything he did was for him and in God's interest. [/ QUOTE ] I just don't like having that 3 word sentence before, seems like something a 5 year old would write. Overall though I do that better than what I wrote. However, I still don't see my sentence being a run on. [img]/images/graemlins/confused.gif[/img]
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#6
05-21-2006, 07:13 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
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I don't know if it's a run-on, but the sentence is really redundant. Cromwell: 1. lived for god 2. believed everything he did was for God 3. everything he did was in God's interest. How are those things substantially different? It could easlily be shorter. [/ QUOTE ] I realized rereading through it that it was redundant, but I don't think that qualifies it as being a run on by itself.
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#7
05-21-2006, 07:14 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
Cromwell made mistakes, some of which were terrible, but ...
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#8
05-21-2006, 07:19 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
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[ QUOTE ] I would say... Cromwell made mistakes. Some were terrible, but he was a man who lived for God , and he believed that everything he did was for him and in God's interest. [/ QUOTE ] I just don't like having that 3 word sentence before, seems like something a 5 year old would write. Overall though I do that better than what I wrote. However, I still don't see my sentence being a run on. [img]/images/graemlins/confused.gif[/img] [/ QUOTE ] I was just trying to make the point that using your wording, it should be at least 2 sentences. If you don't like the 3 word sentence rewrite it.
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#10
05-21-2006, 07:21 PM
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Re: Run on sentence?!
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[ QUOTE ] [ QUOTE ] I would say... Cromwell made mistakes. Some were terrible, but he was a man who lived for God , and he believed that everything he did was for him and in God's interest. [/ QUOTE ] I just don't like having that 3 word sentence before, seems like something a 5 year old would write. Overall though I do that better than what I wrote. However, I still don't see my sentence being a run on. [img]/images/graemlins/confused.gif[/img] [/ QUOTE ] I was just trying to make the point that using your wording, it should be at least 2 sentences. If you don't like the 3 word sentence rewrite it. [/ QUOTE ] That's what I figured, thx for the thoughts
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