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Atheistoxity
I am a long time browser and I ran across this poem that I thought I'd post here. Enjoy browsing the forum though.
Atheistoxity What is the purpose, where is my place, in this planet that's in orbit, a tiny dot in space. The gift of feeling, do I abuse? Is there a wrong? Am I that confused? Why should I try, were all just gonna die, my body will decay, my loved ones tears will dry. Why can't I puff a cig, be gay and wear a wig, thread my vain with a needle, if that's what I wanna feel. If I can't see, then I can't believe, what a man can't prove, I cannot conceive. Simple are my desires as they are relative to my need, Carnal is my only pleasure, for it's what I can instantly heed. Narcissistic mind, the book whoring trend accepting my faults, the only time I spend. Is this all an agenda? A brainwashing genius plan, did I plant a seed that can't stop growing, it's hard just being a man. |
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Theistoxity
What is the purpose, where is my place, God made it all, and I'm gonna be saved. The gift of thinking, do I abuse? Is there a truth? Am I that confused? Why should I try, as long as I believe, The God up in heaven, will give me reprieve. I can't puff a cig, be gay and wear a wig, God makes that bad, I'll get put in the brig! If I can't see, then I believe even more, what a man can't prove, is proven for sure! Simple are my beliefs as they relate to my need, Escape is my only pleasure, for it's all I can heed. Narcissistic mind, the Jesus whoring trend Me and my kind go there, the place where I want to end. Is this all an agenda? A brainwashing genius plan, What if there was no God? It's hard being just a man. So give me the Jesus wafers, I'm a good little cookie I'll swallow them whole, and refrain from the nookie. |
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I am a long time browser and I ran across this poem that I thought I'd post here. Enjoy browsing the forum though. Atheistoxity What is the purpose, where is my place, in this planet that's in orbit, a tiny dot in space. The gift of feeling, do I abuse? Is there a wrong? Am I that confused? Why should I try, were all just gonna die, my body will decay, my loved ones tears will dry. Why can't I puff a cig, be gay and wear a wig, thread my vain with a needle, if that's what I wanna feel. If I can't see, then I can't believe, what a man can't prove, I cannot conceive. Simple are my desires as they are relative to my need, Carnal is my only pleasure, for it's what I can instantly heed. Narcissistic mind, the book whoring trend accepting my faults, the only time I spend. Is this all an agenda? A brainwashing genius plan, did I plant a seed that can't stop growing, it's hard just being a man. [/ QUOTE ] That change in the rhyme structure is irritating to me. I'm glad Phil's version fixes it. |
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So give me the Jesus wafers, I'm a good little cookie I'll swallow them whole, and refrain from the nookie. [/ QUOTE ] Good work, sir. [img]/images/graemlins/grin.gif[/img] |
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Phil,
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Must of been a chore to twist a couple words! But I can see how u would feel threatened to leave as is.....
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Must of been a chore to twist a couple words! But I can see how u would feel threatened to leave as is..... [/ QUOTE ] What about your poem, Wiiiiman, do you find threatening to Atheists? At first I thought it was extolling the virtues of your typical atheist, until I saw the title that had the word toxic in it. But it indicates that atheists are non- judgmental about gays and people who wear wigs, and they are book whores ( whatever that means, but I assume that they like to read ). I’ve heard Phil say that he thinks homosexuality is a mental disease, which is actually ok. People don’t generally bash in peoples' heads because they have an unfortunate disease. But if you choose to be a sinner, well then. . . |
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Must of been a chore to twist a couple words! But I can see how u would feel threatened to leave as is..... [/ QUOTE ] Twisting words is not my game I was looking to be fresh. The final stanza I really liked I thought it would impress! Shakespeare said that poetry is music made from words But rhyming poems seem to me Like squeezing out some ... But threatened I am not And discussion I'll oblige But you need to write in prose And bring an open mind... Welcome to SMP. |
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[ QUOTE ] Must of been a chore to twist a couple words! But I can see how u would feel threatened to leave as is..... [/ QUOTE ] Twisting words is not my game I was looking to be fresh. The final stanza I really liked I thought it would impress! Shakespeare said that poetry is music made from words But rhyming poems seem to me Like squeezing out some ... But threatened I am not And discussion I'll oblige But you need to write in prose And bring an open mind... Welcome to SMP. [/ QUOTE ] [img]/images/graemlins/heart.gif[/img] |
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Wiiiiiiman has been pwned
but if only this he'd knowned, he'd toss god on a dung heap and dare take the atheist mind-leap. (apologies to Phil who really did do a fine job) |
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