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04-15-2007, 12:35 AM
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Re: Writing Competition: Discussion
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A Day in the Life: 2035 Eh, not sure what to make of this one. Nothing wrong with the writing, it's just workmanlike. Sorta not realistic, even within a fantasy environment. All that in like 30 years? Maybe 2235 would have worked better. [/ QUOTE ] You're 100% right db, I dunno... I was trying to show how emotion pretty much didnt exist anymore as we knew it, and so I wanted to write the story in a sort of "sterile" way? Meh 
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#83
04-15-2007, 07:16 PM
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Re: Writing Competition: Discussion
Actual God, was the woman in your story inspired by Ann Coulter? I liked the story but I found it unrealistic that Fanny would end up going home with the Arab. I enjoyed how you structured the story though, how you went back and forth between the two protagonists.
I was surprised that so many of the stories had a religious theme. I am an agnostic but I am a deeply spiritual person, and I wrote The Pillar to portray the destructive power of faith and as a harbinger of things to come. Some may see it as a polemic and I don't necessarily deny that, but I did my best to portray the protagonist in a human light and remain empathetic to him.
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04-15-2007, 08:16 PM
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Re: Writing Competition: Discussion
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Any thoughts on mine? This is actually a prequel to a novel that I'm trying to write. I found it easier to write the backstory as a short story, rather than try to imagine it for the longer form. [/ QUOTE ] My favorite. Good job everyone! Felicia [img]/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img]
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