Anything wrong with my line?

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I know you guys are young, but it still disappoints me you have to be such total [censored] d*ckheads when I provoked you in no way at all. All I'm trying to do is improve my game.

I posted in here because it is a "beat"--last I checked this was "BEATS brags and variance"--and I knew I wouldn't get much useful feedback anywhere else.

You little selfish-assed generation Y punks can go [censored] yourselves. I'm sure it's the closest thing to trim your going to get with such low self-esteem that you have to attack someone for a harmless post.

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