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View Poll Results: Is it the product of skill or the story/script? | |||
It's all in the actor | 2 | 28.57% | |
It's the great script | 5 | 71.43% | |
Voters: 7. You may not vote on this poll |
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Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
So my friend's girl writes him a poem and he shares it with me. He thinks its great but, honestly, I just dont see anything special about it.
** a little disclaimer ** I cant post a pic, he reads the form and will cry. Also, if the poem was actually good, i'd be the first to acknowlege it. anyways, you guys take a look and let us know! Here it is... hungry….I wait ...for I know you satisfy.... I am yours babe forever...always... please stay by my side im soo happy…I am soo happy… I am soo happy … your mine. so, is it great, meh or bad |
#2
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
This poem sucks by any definable standards, but if it's meaningful to both of them, who cares?
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
Issues:
1) Ellipses 2) babe 3) soo 4) your |
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
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Issues: 1) subject matter 2) played out way in which subject matter is developed 3) absence of form, but not in a cool ee cummings way but more of a lame, driveling emo way 4) boring, predictable language [/ QUOTE ] |
#5
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
here is an example of a good love poem:
is there a flower(whom i meet anywhere able to be and seem so quite softly as your hair what bird has perfect fear (of suddenly me) like these first deepest rare quite who are your eyes (shall any dream come a more millionth mile shyly to its doom than you will smile) (cummings obviously) |
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
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Issues: 1) Girly writes boyman lovey poetstuff 2) Boyman knows girly's poetstuff is -ev 3) Boyman can never admit to anyone ever that he knows poetstuff is -ev, for girly may find out and that is even more -ev 4) ??? 5)profit [/ QUOTE ] |
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
I have written a shitton of bad poetry in my day, much of it bad love poetry, and I have never written a piece of crap as bad as that poem.
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
lol understandable sir
edit: understandable in the sense that jafeather = boyman... amirite |
#9
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
lmfao
"your mine" |
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Re: Buddy\'s girl writes him a poem... good or meh?
I think at least 3 of those lines are stolen from those heart-shaped valentine candies with words on them like "Be mine." Ask her if she has any left, those things are pretty tasty.
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