Atheistoxity

[yukoncpa]

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Wiiiiiiman has been pwned
but if only this he'd knowned,
he'd toss god on a dung heap
and dare take the atheist mind-leap.

(apologies to Phil who really did do a fine job)



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Phil has a unique talent. His writing style is pure poetry even when he's writing prose. I realize this obsequiousness is off post, but then I think Mr. Man has retreated.

[Subfallen]

In Rushmore's immortal words...Phil, this is so well done you seem to me to be the smartest and best person in the world.

[Mickey Brausch]

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Why can't I puff a cig, be gay and wear a wig,
thread my vain with a needle, if that's what I wanna feel.

[/ QUOTE ]Lou Reed finds Jesus, changes the lyrics of Heroin and does it as singalong.

There's a nightmare for ya.

[jgca]

Um, formal poetry has a thing called meter. Almost all of the above are godawful.

For instance:

Why should I try, were all just gonna die,
' - - ' - ' - - - '
my body will decay, my loved ones tears will dry.
- ' - ' - ' - ' (-) ' - '

The second is a passable (though not especially fluent) line of iambic hexameter, while the first line is a complete shambles. Nor is it matched by much if any hexameter in the rest of the poem. Basically, this is a very poor poet mangling syntax to produce cheap rhymes, with no sense of the #1 feature of poetic competence, metrical structure.

Phil: sorry dude, but your version is hardly better. At least you don't have the hubris of the original "poet" and fans of his belief system, to think the importance of the belief justifies spreading such literary junk.

[revots33]

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Twisting words is not my game
I was looking to be fresh.
The final stanza I really liked
I thought it would impress!

Shakespeare said that poetry
is music made from words
But rhyming poems seem to me
Like squeezing out some ...

But threatened I am not
And discussion I'll oblige
But you need to write in prose
And bring an open mind...


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lol awesome

[Prodigy54321]

Phil is on point..awesome.

OP: the poem speaks the truth..I feel empty without unicorns [img]/images/graemlins/frown.gif[/img]

[jogger08152]

[ QUOTE ]
Um, formal poetry has a thing called meter. Almost all of the above are godawful.

For instance:

Why should I try, were all just gonna die,
' - - ' - ' - - - '
my body will decay, my loved ones tears will dry.
- ' - ' - ' - ' (-) ' - '

The second is a passable (though not especially fluent) line of iambic hexameter, while the first line is a complete shambles. Nor is it matched by much if any hexameter in the rest of the poem. Basically, this is a very poor poet mangling syntax to produce cheap rhymes, with no sense of the #1 feature of poetic competence, metrical structure.

Phil: sorry dude, but your version is hardly better. At least you don't have the hubris of the original "poet" and fans of his belief system, to think the importance of the belief justifies spreading such literary junk.

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Your commentary
- ' - - -
enlightens like a match struck
- - - - - ' -
in a sunlit glade
' - ' - '

Best regards,
Jogger

[LCposter]

Me like, Phil, although you do have to give Limp Bizkit credit for the original cookie-nookie rhyme.

[Insp. Clue!So?]

[ QUOTE ]
Um, formal poetry has a thing called meter. Almost all of the above are godawful.

For instance:

Why should I try, were all just gonna die,
' - - ' - ' - - - '
my body will decay, my loved ones tears will dry.
- ' - ' - ' - ' (-) ' - '

The second is a passable (though not especially fluent) line of iambic hexameter, while the first line is a complete shambles. Nor is it matched by much if any hexameter in the rest of the poem. Basically, this is a very poor poet mangling syntax to produce cheap rhymes, with no sense of the #1 feature of poetic competence, metrical structure.

Phil: sorry dude, but your version is hardly better. At least you don't have the hubris of the original "poet" and fans of his belief system, to think the importance of the belief justifies spreading such literary junk.

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Are you accusing him of writing godderel?