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Old 10-09-2007, 10:33 AM
Wahoo73 Wahoo73 is offline
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Default Re: Please review my generic letter to Congress

Superb letter and terrific initiative!

I have a few word-smithing suggestions.

1. "...right to play poker online was inadvertently restricted...": I don't understand your inclusion of the word inadvertently, as I thought the UIGEA specifically mentions poker. If so, then I suggest you delete "inadvertently" for accuracy.

2. "...UIGEA does not apply to Internet poker nationwide...": If my first point is correct, then your use of the word "apply" in this sentence is incorrect. Perhaps you should change "apply to" to "criminalize," inasmuch as this would be more accurate.

3. "...hearings on Internet gaming proved conclusively that...": I believe this is unneccessary hyperbole. Perhaps it would be more accurate to say "...hearings on Internet gaming provided highly convincing expert testimony that..."

Again, thanks for all your hard work on these initiatives the past several months.
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