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"Filling up water bottles to the perfect height, screaming with every shot that goes in and always being optimistic are things that I pride myself on."

The structure here is kinda awkward, I think it would sound a lot better as "I pride myself on filling up water bottles, . . . . ." Also, there should be a comma after the word "in."


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