Group project member thinks he writes better than I do, you decide.

[stephan]

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You both suck. Don't split infinitives.

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In order to effectively cater to their customers needs, Francis Vega and his staff worked around the clock and overcame immense adversity.

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My bad. I wouldn't have written it that way to begin with, but I tried not to drastically change what was written.

[Borodog]

Stopped reading when you totally FUBARed the meaning of #2.

[stephan]

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Stopped reading when you totally FUBARed the meaning of #2.

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Yeah, i [censored] that one up. I messed up #2, but all the others are better than his.

[DirtyDiggs]

You'd get a more objective response if you posted the sentences without identifying the author.

Or in language more suitable to your liking, "To verily elict objectivness from those voting on your writing ability, its best for one to be able to have their name removed so as that it doesn't act to unduly influence the outcome when they participate. They being those evaluating."

[asofel]

Bison wins

...and your sentences are far too passive (thats one of the biggest differences in Bison's posts)


a, b, c and d were x y and z
j, k, l, and m was good for n, o, and q

Make things more active...

Instead of "x was a result of y" say "Y caused x".

[tabako]

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You'd get a more objective response if you posted the sentences without identifying the author.

Or in language more suitable to your liking, "To verily elict objectivness from those voting on your writing ability, its best for one to be able to have their name removed so as that it doesn't act to unduly influence the outcome when they participate. They being those evaluating."

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gold

[Jiggymike]

I only skimmed these but yours seemed better with flow while your partner overuses words. My gf sends me her work to correct and I often have to change the sentences around to make them sound better but at least I get to sex her afterwards.

[stephan]

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Bison wins

...and your sentences are far too passive (thats one of the biggest differences in Bison's posts)


a, b, c and d were x y and z
j, k, l, and m was good for n, o, and q

Make things more active...

Instead of "x was a result of y" say "Y caused x".

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I agree. The writing workshop must really suck if they overlooked all this stuff.


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You'd get a more objective response if you posted the sentences without identifying the author.

Or in language more suitable to your liking, "To verily elict objectivness from those voting on your writing ability, its best for one to be able to have their name removed so as that it doesn't act to unduly influence the outcome when they participate. They being those evaluating."

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I'm not sure if it makes a difference. I don't see why any of you would be too scared to or too motivated to bring me down, considering I barely know any of you.

[protocol]

You think you've got it bad? Yesterday I spent 5 hours in a group meeting that I probably could have done entirely by myself in 2. I spent most of the time arguing with non-native English speakers about obvious grammatical mistakes that they insisted were correct. To give you some idea of what I'm talking about, here's the email I initially recieved from one of the guys after being assigned to the group:



hi folks:
thank you guys to form a group together, i think we will glad to work
on the cases and presentations in the class, now i am sending out a list
of our group members information. any needs please contact each other,

[DirtyDiggs]

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You'd get a more objective response if you posted the sentences without identifying the author.

Or in language more suitable to your liking, "To verily elict objectivness from those voting on your writing ability, its best for one to be able to have their name removed so as that it doesn't act to unduly influence the outcome when they participate. They being those evaluating."

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I'm not sure if it makes a difference. I don't see why any of you would be too scared to or too motivated to bring me down, considering I barely know any of you.

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Pick a response, either one works:

1.) At some point in your education you'll learn of baising or the "anchor" effect in studies.

2.) You must not have been around OOT for very long.