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04-26-2007, 01:53 AM
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Re: story
good story, well-written. although I think your descriptions of Hold'em are a little too "beginner's poker" if you know what I mean...you need to describe the hands as if we already know how to play the game without it being completely impossible to understand for those readers who have no clue about the game. Walk that line, you know?
Also, in these couple of sentences: The final card was the queen of hearts, pairing the queen of clubs that had shown on the flop. It looked like he had the winning hand, . He bet and I hesitated for a moment before calling his bet. It sounds as if he bet and you called already...be careful how you phrase that last sentence. good job though! 
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#13
04-26-2007, 01:57 AM
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Re: story
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good story, well-written. although I think your descriptions of Hold'em are a little too "beginner's poker" if you know what I mean...you need to describe the hands as if we already know how to play the game without it being completely impossible to understand for those readers who have no clue about the game. Walk that line, you know? Also, in these couple of sentences: The final card was the queen of hearts, pairing the queen of clubs that had shown on the flop. It looked like he had the winning hand, . He bet and I hesitated for a moment before calling his bet. It sounds as if he bet and you called already...be careful how you phrase that last sentence. good job though! [/ QUOTE ] WTF? I though there was no chance of any1 actually reading this.
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#16
04-26-2007, 02:00 AM
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[ QUOTE ] dom, your sincere and non haterish style is annoying. [/ QUOTE ] HOW CAN SOMEONE WRITE A STORY WITH NO PICTURES?!?! [/ QUOTE ] I think you just use words or something like that.
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#18
04-26-2007, 02:02 AM
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Thats dumb and stupid and gay. [/ QUOTE ] Agreed.
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