so i decided to enter the rap game...

[James00]

Its time to battle this clown, DJ turn that music up....

yo yo yo yo check it out....

you fkin suck ,this aint nothin new,
your rhymes stink like the [censored] on my shoe,so yo f*ck you
you aint as good as it seems, i get b1tches you only see in your wetdreams,
if theres a class for rap b1tch take it, face it you cant win in this game your too basic, so dont fake it, b1tch get out your [censored] too lame, ill take you otta fame, cause your losin the game,the names James.

Advie: Take your ass back across 8 mile back to the GYM, FATTTY.

[alphatmw]

i expected this to be bad, then read the comments and expected it to be really good, and it sort of fell in between.

ability to ride the beat: A
delivery: B-, very unenthusiastic and bored sounding (you said you had to be quiet so that's why i guess)
lyrical content: A-, mostly good bbv stuff, although i hated the "verbal bullet lead" line
lyrical rhyming: C, pet peeve of mine but i hate monosyllabic rhymes in rap. rapping is really easy, relative to everything else so the only way to make it decent is to make the rhyming scheme somewhat complex.

[Cumulonimbus]

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i expected this to be bad, then read the comments and expected it to be really good, and it sort of fell in between.

ability to ride the beat: A
delivery: B-, very unenthusiastic and bored sounding (you said you had to be quiet so that's why i guess)
lyrical content: A-, mostly good bbv stuff, although i hated the "verbal bullet lead" line
lyrical rhyming: C, pet peeve of mine but i hate monosyllabic rhymes in rap. rapping is really easy, relative to everything else so the only way to make it decent is to make the rhyming scheme somewhat complex.

[/ QUOTE ]

whatev mr critical, it was still dope. what it do nation.

[catcher193]

ahahahahahaha awesome.

[dngrjoe]

awesome, but yeah, do it when you don't have to whisper

[TheFaucet]

nation stop ripping off gza

[Isura]

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nice

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[Grey]

I give it a B. There were a couple times when you used too many syllables, etc. Not bad at all though.

Just listened again. It's all the "zero" that rub wrong. You used it three times and it sounded wrong every time.

[Dvc]

I like it. Well done nation [img]/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img]

[Grey]

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i dont undestand, just a page opens and no music..?

[/ QUOTE ]Don't look now, but I think you just failed an IQ test.