Since you asked for more, 2 more self indulgent short stories...

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Not bad, but it seems like something you'd write in high school. Also, you come off as trying too hard to be intellectual and/or witty. There's a time and place for it, you overuse it IMO, if only because the subject matter doesn't really warrant it.

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A valid point... I will try to bottle up the witticisms a bit.

-JP