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a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
love is a four letter word
it sings lovely like a bird your hair is black and divine oh please god wont you be mine we struggle and life is unfair so we think in our hearts, does anyone care? you are only eleven years old but i shall let it be told please control your fears it will only be seven more years Saaya Irie |
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
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don’t treat OOT as your blog [/ QUOTE ] http://forumserver.twoplustwo.com/showfl...e=0#Post7612046 |
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
Weezer?
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
using "lovely" to describe "love" seems awkward.
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
I thought this was going to be extremely painful to read, but instead it was hilarious.
Btw, she doesn't look 11 or whatever, and if she is, I'd kill you and her both if I were her mom, for taking pictures of her like that. But I guess the whole thing was a sort of strange perverse joke. Or I suppose I hope it was. |
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
I call this "To my one love, on the night of our consummation:"
My love for you is stronger than an ocean tide, Yet fragile as the sweetest teardrop, Hey, you're not a cop right? You have to tell me if you're a cop. My love has no concern for propriety, It cares not for polite or punctual. Oh, um, you're fully functional, yes? The ad said fully functional. There is love unbound in one of your words, Desire infinite in your laugh, [censored] you bitch, if I only cum once, You only get half. |
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
There once was an O-O-T forum.
Some said that it needed decorum. For ideas they scrounged 'Til they came up with The Lounge With slogan: if you can't beat 'em then bore 'em. |
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
Blarg,
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Saaya_Irie She is one of the most beautiful women on this planet. |
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
she looks 18 to me
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Re: a poem i wrote (post yours or critique mine)
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Blarg, http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Saaya_Irie She is one of the most beautiful young teenage girls on the planet. [/ QUOTE ] This is my first ever FYP. |
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