[pokergrader]

Intro needs a lot of work, I don't think you should mention knee area.

2nd and 3rd paragraphs are the same idea, make that into one paragraph.

The 4th paragraph is where the essay transitions and needs to be better, along with the conclusion.

I think:

-Intro and love of basketball
-Basketball career and knee injuries
-How you responded to knee injuries and more opportunities
-How this made you a better person
-How this will affect you in the future

Is a very solid college essay. Just keep working and rewriting it.