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Old 11-28-2007, 08:51 PM
SuperUberBob SuperUberBob is offline
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Default Re: college essay help

Ummm, what's the point of this paper? Seriously, I just don't see what exactly this paper is about. It lacks a clear focus and proper organization of critical ideas. Your into and conclusion paragraph are bland and short.

This might be a C in a college course. I would re-write it and then take it to a campus writing center.
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