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Old 11-27-2007, 05:34 AM
Ganjasaurus Rex Ganjasaurus Rex is offline
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Default Re: college essay help

The way you write about Magic the Gathering is almost creepy. Many reviewers wouldn't read this as being a positive aspect of your life. I like the part about musicals. I'd recommend dropping the Magic and keeping the Musical part.

Also, use paragraphs more frequently. It's easier to read.
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