Re: Critique My Personal Statement
Quick nitty thing: the first sentence is not correct, ducy?
'Unlike some' applies to 'my interest' - the subject of the sentence and the thing closest to 'unlike some' - when you meant it to apply to you yourself. You can change it to
[ QUOTE ]
Unlike some, I became interested in pharmacy very recently.
[/ QUOTE ]
or whatever. This corrects the modifier stuff and takes away that nasty passive voice that Microsoft Word is always bugging you about.
Yeah, it's a little thing, but if a nit happens to read this, it'll affect his first impression of you.
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