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Old 10-09-2007, 04:22 PM
TheEngineer TheEngineer is offline
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Default Re: Please review my generic letter to Congress

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Superb letter and terrific initiative!

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Thanks for the compliment.

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I have a few word-smithing suggestions.

1. "...right to play poker online was inadvertently restricted...": I don't understand your inclusion of the word inadvertently, as I thought the UIGEA specifically mentions poker. If so, then I suggest you delete "inadvertently" for accuracy.

2. "...UIGEA does not apply to Internet poker nationwide...": If my first point is correct, then your use of the word "apply" in this sentence is incorrect. Perhaps you should change "apply to" to "criminalize," inasmuch as this would be more accurate.

3. "...hearings on Internet gaming proved conclusively that...": I believe this is unneccessary hyperbole. Perhaps it would be more accurate to say "...hearings on Internet gaming provided highly convincing expert testimony that..."

Again, thanks for all your hard work on these initiatives the past several months.

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Thanks for the comments. I appreciate the points. As for points #1 and #2, UIGEA didn't mention poker by name, fortunately, so the letter is fine there. As for #3, I don't disagree with your comment, but the little bit of over-the-top hyperbole was an intentional attention grabber. We did own that hearing, so I thought we should crow about it a little.
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