[Keyser.]

Was there a specific question or statement you were supposed to address? Or was it just a "tell as about yourself" prompt? Just wondering because admissions councils like when your essay seems like it was written purely for their school, and not just a standard piece you'll send to the other 10 colleges to which you apply.

That said, I actually think the topic is pretty cool. It's definitely not what most people will write about.

There are quite a few sentence-level things that could be fixed but I'll just the resident writing teacher do that b/c his changes will be better than mine.