[Keyser.]

Yeah, I agree with that. I guess I'm basically warning people not to "revise, revise, revise" in the wrong way. For example, don't use a thesaurus to change every word in your piece to try and make yourself sound smart (which you already brought up nicely). I think the perfect essay would be one that you worked very hard on by making lots of revisions, but one that still reads with a natural and effortless tone.