Re: Please respond: a short fiction piece
Look at this sentence:
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Jackson’s eyebrows raised and his eyes got a soft glow in them.
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How about: "his eyes glowed." Avoid "got" by all means. You can add the "softly" if you feel you need it.
One final note: Plastic wrappers on fortune cookies don't "conceal" them, at least not the ones I've seen.
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