[Gildwulf]

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I stopped reading after this:

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JOHN
Well maybe if you stopped blowing all
your money on handjobs from the chef at
Fazoli's, money wouldn't be such a
problem.

BRIAN
Yeah, well I guess I'll have to go back
to getting the free ones from your mom.

JOHN
Well at least that way you are only
blowing one of your wads.

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This sounds like "you kinda had to be there" dialogue...if my friend said this to me I would say something like "WHOAAAAAAH" and then highfive, but on paper and out of context it's just an awkward and uncomfortably unfunny dialogue.

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i disagree this is very funny. person with gimmick account, who are you?

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Yea, the your mom joke IS pretty clever...


Seriously, say this dialogue out loud and tell me if you don't hear a cymbal crash after 'wad'. I don't pretend to be an amazing writer, but I know funny and this isn't funny.

Edit:

the following dialogue is the same thing, it just feels forced and awkward:



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BRIAN
Okay. And umm, do you have any picks?

JOHN, standing next to BRIAN, notices a large display of
picks on the counter. JOHN makes a face to the store employee
as if to say 'sorry, my friend is retarded'.

STORE EMPLOYEE
I believe there may be some right there.

The STORE EMPLOYEE does an exaggerated point towards the
display.

STORE EMPLOYEE (CONT'D)
We would not be much of a music store
without picks, now would we?


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It's like that OOT post a few weeks ago when an OOTIOT went into a EB Games and asked the clerk if he could buy the game and the clerk responded, 'I don't know, CAN you?'.

He probably thinks that is the funniest thing EVER and told all his 15-year old friends how badly he owned some moran. Looking in from the outside though, we can see that this is just not funny at all.