Beat or brag? My english essay
This is an english essay I wrote and got back from my english teacher a week ago. Got 92 points out of 99 (like A on american scale I think) and that's the best result I've ever scored. I go to upper secondary school in Finland, can you believe that?
Here's the story: "Once in a lifetime I think it was somewhere around January when I visited the Helsinki Grand Casino for the very first time. I remember coming there somewhere around eight o'clok and noticing how the pokerroom was already full of gamblers After four to five hours of waiting I finally got a seat on one table where they played no limit texas hold 'em with two hundred euro buy-in. I was sitting right next to the dealer and my first dealt hand was a queen-jack offsuit. I limped in in a raised pot and the flop was queen high with two hearts in it. It was a heads up situation with me versus some semiprofessional player. Of course I bet my top pair and got called. The turn was a third queen, which gave me a set but it didn't complete the flush draw. I bet again not knowing what my villain had. And then there was the river dealt: the fourth and the last queen in the deck. I was holding the nuts. I can not say if my hands were shaking or not but I bet for the last time and this time I got raised. Maybe the villain had a full house and didn't believe I was holding a queen or then he was just bluffing. I had to go all-in to call the raise and the villain showed a busted flush draw, which means he had nothing and the two-hundred-euro pot was shipped to me. Everyone congratulated me and I was really happy to double up in the first hand I ever played. I left the casino and cashed out a bit over three hundred euros, took a cab home and propably fell asleep with a smile on my face." Do you agree with my teacher or would you give me even higher or lower points? Feedback accepted. |
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propably fell asleep [/ QUOTE ] "propably" is not a word. "Promptly" or "probably" would fit. Beat: I'm point out mistakes in your english essay |
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F-
1. You turned trips, not a set. 2. You waited 4-5 hours for a seat, doubled up right away, and left? lol |
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Man there must be some dumb mother Fers in Finland if that is an A quality essay
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I kinda was waiting for this to happen. Just wanted to see if you really were so rude as expected.
Never remember how to type "probably" correct. And as I got to the table about 1am I played till the casino was closed 4am and left after that. Anyways, I think it was a good trip for a first timer: tripled up from €100 (as I didn't buy in with the full €200). Don't u think so? |
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you suck at life
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i dont know where to start.
1. you make me feel ashamed of my nationality. 2. your teacher/classmates must be retarded if this is one of the best essays of the class. 3. the title is so cheesy i wouldnt even bother reading it if i was your teacher. [ QUOTE ] I remember coming there [/ QUOTE ] how about arriving? [ QUOTE ] with two hundred euro buy-in. [/ QUOTE ] with A two hundred euro buy-in. the minimum buy-in is actually 50 euros, good job at misleading the readers. [ QUOTE ] my first dealt hand was a queen-jack offsuit. [/ QUOTE ] you cant refer to two cards as "a queen-jack" in written language. i would rephrase this "the first hand that was dealt to me...". [ QUOTE ] I limped in in a raised pot and the flop was queen high with two hearts in it. [/ QUOTE ] you cant limp in to a raised pot. the "in it" in the end of the sentence is useless. you cant assume the reader knows poker lingo like "limp, flop, queen high, offsuit, nuts" etc. [ QUOTE ] some semiprofessional player. [/ QUOTE ] if an unemployed person who happens to play poker is a semiprofessional then yes, otherwise no. according to your story he seems like some spewing drunk idiot. [ QUOTE ] I bet again not knowing what my villain had. [/ QUOTE ] youre playing poker without knowing what your opponents have?! [ QUOTE ] And then there was the river dealt [/ QUOTE ] are you serious here? this line (or verbal vomit) sums up your essay pretty well. i wouldnt honestly rate this essay anything higher than 60 points. please tell me what class youre on in "lukio" and what city you live in [img]/images/graemlins/smile.gif[/img] |
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where is the thesis?
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Wow.. sorry. I didn't realise it was that bad.
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