Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

For DBZ and those who care a whit
I'll speak the reasons I am not a nit.
To recap my distaste for Tom Stoppard:
It's not so much that his text is real hard.
You see, Bill Shakespere is often quite tough
But rarely does he waste my mental stuff.
To parse his meaning from anachronism
Can often lead to sturm and drang.
But if his use of language can be sick
His words, when understood, cut to the quick.
With fancy turns of phrase, Tom Obfuscates
More subtle points than he elucidates.
I think that I shall mark this speech as done.
I hope it was received in due good fun.

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

I say shotgun
Because it is a lot of fun
to post in threads
before they are dead
Please don't troll
I'm on a roll
What is with OP
I'm the real OG
Is it absurd
I don't get a word?

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

Solid. B to B-. Meter needs a little work for A material.

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

visual rhyme is good, but learn how to pronounce stoppard

jk believe in jesus

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

I'm invoking the dramatic license defense. [img]/images/graemlins/wink.gif[/img]

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

Wunderbar.

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Rhyme scheme too standard imo, but the Volte is nice. Could have done with a lacuna to make it more clear, obv.

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

There once was a guy from Nantucket......

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I'm a theatre nerd too, so I have to be picky here

5th line doesn't work-emphasis is on the "ften" part of often
8th line only has 4 feet-is this intentional?

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

Yes that is a deliberate break in both the meter and the rhyme scheme to emphasize the difficulty of parsing meaning and the impact of sturm and drang.

As for the other one, switch "often" and "is" for a more enjoyable experience.

Other flaws include the emphasis landing on the 2nd syllable of Stoppard in line 3

I also find it almost impossible to spit out "text is" in line 4 without altering the meter.

And of course the rhyme scheme is not exactly subtle.

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

Why do you need to be a theatre
major in order to write down words?
It's not very difficult if you've
heard the songs of a few passing birds.
Must I show this to all of you,
or did many of you already know?
I'm hoping that you did BBV,
for now 'tis my time to go.

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

Frankly,
I'm embarrassed
for
all you
ratfinks
for even attempting to capture
the heart of a
Modern Woman
with such out-
dated forms!
Get with the times
[censored] [censored] [censored] boners
meter and rhyme is like
a metaphor without a
very specific direct
object = befuddling.
What would LeRoi Jones
do? Kill
Whitey,
that is all.

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

Actually Stoppard does have the emphasis on the second syllable, I heard a tape of him one time and he said his own name "Stuhpard" with the emphasis on "pard."

Anyways, A+ just for fitting obfuscate in there

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

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Actually Stoppard does have the emphasis on the second syllable, I heard a tape of him one time and he said his own name "Stuhpard" with the emphasis on "pard."

[/ QUOTE ]

Oops I've been saying it wrong for years then. Thanks for the info and response. And for having the bustedtees redhead as your avatar. [img]/images/graemlins/grin.gif[/img]

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

[ QUOTE ]
For DBZ and those who care a whit
I'll speak the reasons I am not a nit.
To recap my distaste for Tom Stoppard:
It's not so much that his text is real hard.
You see, Bill Shakespere is often quite tough
But rarely does he waste my mental stuff.
To parse his meaning from anachronism
Can often lead to sturm and drang.
But if his use of language can be sick
His words, when understood, cut to the quick.
With fancy turns of phrase, Tom Obfuscates
More subtle points than he elucidates.
I think that I shall mark this speech as done.
I hope it was received in due good fun.

[/ QUOTE ]

I'd gladly smell it sir

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

[ QUOTE ]
Frankly,
I'm embarrassed
for
all you
ratfinks
for even attempting to capture
the heart of a
Modern Woman
with such out-
dated forms!
Get with the times
[censored] [censored] [censored] boners
meter and rhyme is like
a metaphor without a
very specific direct
object = befuddling.
What would LeRoi Jones
do? Kill
Whitey,
that is all.

[/ QUOTE ]


lozlomg


i wouldn't've minded some of this action though:


"Frankly,
I'm embarrassed
for
all you
ratfinks
for even attempting to capture
the heart of a
Modern Woman
with such out-
dated forms!

Get with the times

[censored]

[censored]

[censored]

b
o
n
e
r
s


meter and rhyme is like



a



metaphor without a
very specific direct
object = befuddling.

What would LeRoi Jones
do?

Kill





Whitey,
that is all."

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

no but srsrly wtf at the op

wtf at it

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srsly rhyming poetry, unless done by someone with complete mastery of the english language, sounds terrible

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[ QUOTE ]
srsly rhyming poetry, unless done by someone with complete mastery of the english language, sounds terrible

[/ QUOTE ]idk about complete mastery but basically, you're right

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

if you read something by Shakespeare of Marlowe or Yeats etc it doesn't even sound like they are trying to rhyme things.

That isn't to say that people nowadays can't write poetry, I would say to look at rap and see an eminem or nas song to see how rhyming can be discreet not "THERE WAS FOG AND A DOG DOWN BY THE BOG"

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

[ QUOTE ]
if you read something by Shakespeare of Marlowe or Yeats etc it doesn't even sound like they are trying to rhyme things.

That isn't to say that people nowadays can't write poetry, I would say to look at rap and see an eminem or nas song to see how rhyming can be discreet not "THERE WAS FOG AND A DOG DOWN BY THE BOG"

[/ QUOTE ]I agree 100% fwiw

Re: Grotesquely nerdy theatre geekery for DBZ
 

[ QUOTE ]
THERE WAS FOG AND A DOG DOWN BY THE BOG

[/ QUOTE ]

I think we has a hit imo.

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so
many
lines

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wtf is this.
rhyming and meter are dumb,
syllable counts aren't.

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Socrates' philosophies and hypotheses can't define how I be droppin these mockeries