Re: I wrote a story (kinda) what does OOT think?
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Solid.
However, I feel like the first sentence is somehow wrong. When I read the first paragraph I expected this to be some kind of emergency situation that caused a rush similar to what you used to feel when you were wrestling, but then it was actually about wrestling.
Just my two cents, I'm far from a writer though.
ken
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Thats kind of what i am trying to convey, it was like i was out there with him.... does that make sense? like i was wrestling, even though i was helpless... does that come off at all?
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Yes it definitly comes through, but its almost to obvious. I think I would have started with something like, "I could feel the chalk under my finger tips" ( if they use chalk, I don't know) or some smaller detail of what its like to be wrestling.
Ken
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