Re: banging chicks from myspace.com
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Spladle I agree with the others that your introduction is too wordy. You just go on and on. I like [censored]'s opener a lot better. It is intriguing. Brevity can be cool. Your entire introduction could be shortened to one line.
"Saw one of your pics - Yummy!!"
(I like this opener better.)
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I like this one better to.
blake
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