[Spladle]

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I may have been a bit harsh earlier.

let me do an analysis.

The good:

1. You won't piss her off.
2. You probably wont scare her.
3. You expressed interest in her (so you made your point).
4. You got her attention.
5. You were funny (or tried to be, which is often enough)


Some of those may overlap, but i'm tired.

The bad:

1. You really did come off like a little bitch. Girls don't want to date little bitches.

2. This means you are likely to end up in friend zone.

3. You complimented her (which I think is a bad idea in an opener. We'll discuss it in opener theory later)

4. You failed to differentiate yourself from other guys. She sees you as the standard, no date getting loser on the internet. No flare.

5. You take no steps to develop her attraction towards you (besides being nonpushy which is good)

6. You don't seem like a challenge, nor do you establish any kind of self value.

blake

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Now this I can use. Thank you for the constructive criticism, I am always open to that.

Points one and two are related so I will respond to them simultaneously. I do not, unfortunately, recognize what it is I said that made me come off as a little bitch. Please elaborate on this because I do agree that girls do not want to [censored] little bitches.

Please elaborate also on why it is a bad idea to compliment her.

I agree that there is little to distinguish my letter from many others like it that women as attractive as her likely receive often. This part, perhaps, could be made a little more formulaic, though a little variation based upon the type of chick you were trying to lay would almost certainly be a good idea.

Regarding inciting attraction towards me: I do not know of any way to do this other than being myself. I am a pretty awesome human. That usually does the trick but if you have other ways please share them with me. I would appreciate that. 'Kay thanks.

Clarify point six as I am not sure what you were trying to say.