Re: Saw a fight in the street this morning (Trip report)
You need to work on your storytelling.
Then out of no where the big guy I guess gets mad and decked the other guy right in the face and then they were trading punches and wrestling around.
This is where you dropped the ball. You need to give more details than just this. If this is as interesting as it gets, this story isn't worth telling.
Also, paragraphs would be nice.
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