Thread: Fast Food Haiku
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Old 02-04-2006, 12:45 AM
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Default Re: Fast Food Haiku

[ QUOTE ]
I can’t believe it
They forgot the straw again
Just like the last time

[/ QUOTE ]

This is the only one I don't like. The word "again" in the second line makes the third line redundant. Find another sentiment for the third line -- like another thought/joke.
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